Bit of a start on the abstract. Could do with some feedback on this, and what is required in general
This paper explores potential improvements in path finding and articulation of circulation spaces that can be achieved with the testing of schemes in an interactive virtual environment. It proceeds to suggest opportunities that can extend the use of such tests to combine them into an integrated architectural system that can benefit extensive areas of the community. The health care community forms the focus as the architectural system, which expands upon a Master of Architecture body of work, but the application of such systems are also analysed for their benefits to commercial developments and current organisational systems in general.
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Hey Jules...
There was just a spelling era that i changed here in capitals..
"The health care community forms the focus OF the architectural system, which expands upon a Master of Architecture body of work, but the application of such systems are also analysed for their benefits to commercial developments and current organisational systems in general."
Also, this last sentence is a little confusing. I get your intention, but maybe explain the master body of work thing and then go on to explain its application in the wider community in two different sentences.
Hope this helps
Jo
"extensive areas of the community" sounds a little vague and confusing.
Also, "this paper"? What paper? The 500 word paper? Or do you mean the project to come?
'This paper' is the paper to come. The abstract is the 'blurb' or summary of the final paper as i understand it.
Good stuff guys, thanks
Ah, didn't read the title of the post... thought it was the abstract for our next submission.
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